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Need your opinions on my poetry

Discussion in 'Off-Topic' started by Lilangloc, Jan 31, 2016.

  1. Hey I'm laclac inspiring to tell my story through music and poetry so tell me what ya think about this ballad poem excuse the language its the way I think and product of my environment well here goes.......

    Its called "How Could You Forget"

    Bypassing my focal skills
    F***ing with each other like a local deal
    Crying my sympathy toward you
    Trying to please you so we can have a better view

    Vivid recalls of how we invented s*x
    Gloomy livid passion and hatred specs noted
    Devoted, Bloated feeling loaded on this drank
    Igniting dank, elevating till I'm unconscious also blank

    This love affair chalked up as a lost
    Can't accept this balk at all cost
    Savoring this well know muddy water
    It's my lifesaver from time to time, manslaughter



    Yours truly,
    LacLacangloc